Everything is falling apart, my specs are gone and I can’t see. Simon is uh….I Shuddered. Jack has taken my specs I wont be able to see now. I wish Jack would of never been on this island. I wish my auntie was here. I wish so many things. Maybe we could build a boat or send a letter to my aunite. I got up and walked away from where I was. I wasn’t sure where I was going because I couldn’t see, but I was going there. I felt my way to a plam and sat down in the shade. I sat there listening to nature for about an hour, Then Ralph came up,
“You alright Piggy?”
“Yeah I’m alright. They took my specs though,”
“I know. Jack took them, I tried to fight ‘em off, but…”
Ralph just trailed off,
“Want some fruit?” he gesticulated. I could barly make out the movements, but I did.
“Sure,” I said.
Ralph handed me a piece of fruit and left. I smothered myself as I ate it 'cause I was so hungry. So I went to find Ralph, maybe he had more fruit.
"Ralph is that you?"
"Yeah," I sat down and started to talk, " Ralph you know what happened and I need to say that it was......" I paused for a moment, then regained my words, " It was MURDER!" I couldn't believe I said that, but I did.
2 comments:
"The fight was really scary for me, my assmar was really acting up."
I know this is the first sentence and all but I can't help but admire your skill on writing from the charaters perspective. You definatily need to write a book or something.
:)
-Leyla
“You alright Piggy?”“Yeah I’m alright. They took my specs though,”“I know.
I like this part and maybe you could talk about were they are or maybe add a little more to the ending more action.
But it's good
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